Antigone Cadmus

I have tried to edit the weird indent-space thing, but it won't work. Sorry!

Nice. Good descriptions. Paragraph 3: You used 'threw' instead of "through" Paragraph 4: 'one's' should be 'ones'. You aren't showing possesion here. Also, is this modern time or ancient? I ...

Ooh, wow. An actual good poet! I especially love the use of the word facade. It's totally on my list of fun words. It's meaningful and very true. Good analogies. ...

Thank you :) I'll edit it... Jesus, I suck at writing...

I posted more. :)

Thank you for all the critique! I would post my 30 pages, but I have no idea how to finish the prologue! I know what has to happen in it, ...

Uh, this kind of sounds exactly like Stargirl by Jerry Spinelli (minus the killing), but maybe it's just me. =o

1984, by George Orwell. I'm a little obsessed about this book at the moment, but it's simply incredible. Like, wow. And The Book Thief (Marcus Zusak) and The Lord of ...

He's a Gary-Stue! (Thank you anti-shurtugal.com!)

For names, try to bring in roots from other languages. It's fun to add subliminal messages to your charcters names. (example- mal, from latin: malus for evil....malfoy!)

Thank you so much. :) Do you like this better for a first line: The summer night was hauntingly still.

I haven't tried Jane Eyre, but I can't seem to get into English literature. Pride and Prejudice and Charles Dickens both bored me. I thought the narrative was dry and ...

To Kill a Mockingbird is a great book. I was forced by my mother to read it in sixth grade, and I still loved it.

In the Messanger he's there.

Oh my gosh! Best book ever! I cried at the end.